The smoke alarm low-battery warning starts chirping.
Your kid’s stomach virus hits.
The faucet drips.
You notice that the cracks in the bedroom ceiling have gotten wider.
You hear an old train whistle in the distance.
You remember a song you haven’t heard since 1988.
I wonder where you are.
Robb Lanum is a failed screenwriter in Los Angeles. This is his third 50-word story. His longer, epic works have appeared on 101words.org.
In my comfortable bed…
Yes, that’s the time alright. Enjoyed it.
Loved it, and the hilarious bio! Epic works, eh?
Pow! A lighthearted beginning, an emotional wrench at the end. But the switch from second person to first person at the end introduces ambiguity. Telling the entire story from the same perspective, in the first person, eliminates the problem.