A giant hand comes down upon me. I brace for the impact, but it just rests on top of me. I try to squeak, but it doesn’t come out. I look up just to see a bright square of light, and an object portrayed on the light moves with me.
Victor is Tim’s son, and yeah. Tim is Victor’s dad. Victor’s favorite story on the website is One Job From Retirement by Guy Preston. Victor likes to do animations and has a YouTube channel: youtube.com/@vicobot13. He plays video games and lives in BC, Canada. He is funny and creative and smart.
Editor: And very humble for an 11-year-old.
This is indeed funny and creative and smart. Keep writing em!!
That’s my grandson!
Love the misdirection with ‘squeak’ ! I already loved the story before I saw your age, and I’m astounded know I know.
You’ve got the knack – keep it up!
Made me smile
I love this. Inspiring, clever…keep writing!
Penned by an 11 year old! Very impressive. Great wee story that squeaks! Congratulations, Victor. 🐭
Eleven is a prime number and this 50 word fiction is a prime example of narrative aptitude. — best wishes, BT
Well done, lad! Well done!
I’m in my fifties, and I have to say I would not have known this was written by someone ten years of age. Nicely written.
Love this! Well done, Victor!