As the dark loomed over her, she could feel her heart race.
Suddenly she could hear her own footsteps. She started to move towards a tall derelict building.
The noise of her footsteps faded away, overtaken by an overwhelming screeching like finger nails on a blackboard.
What could it be?
Erin Walker is a 9 year-old girl who in her spare time likes writing stories and singing.
Super scary story, Erin. Loved it. Julia
Ooo… I like this. What happened next?
I’m guessing the building might have been a derelict school haunted by the ghost(s) of lessons past. Keep writing. Well done!
As Neil Gaiman said, a successful story makes the reader, hanging on the edge of her seat, ask “what happens next?” You’ve set the atmosphere and pulled the reader along; very nice writing. FWIW, I say keep it up, Erin!