2 thoughts on “GORDON LYSEN: A Stone’s Throw

  1. ‘Water reflected like a mirrored surface, flat and endless to the horizon and blending with the haze of a summer sky. I threw a stone and disrupted the stillness, as I had with my sister:
    “Mom loved me more!” I said.
    A verbal stone: ripples spread and peace was lost.’

    Sorry, Gordon, being a self-proclaimed student of creative writing and a passionate follower of Flash fiction, I feel I must question your piece (wish others would do it for me…)
    Water (comer) – no verb to follow…
    What stillness is disrupted with ‘the’ sister? The surface of the water? The relationship between you? Or did your sister disrupt the surface of the water also? The word disrupted does this relate to the stillness of the water or the moment? Whichever, fair enough.
    ‘Mom loved me more’ … a cruel thing to say? Not a shattering statement; ‘Mom never loved you’ might carry more weight or ‘Mom loved me more’ (same number of words, right?) The consequences destroy the moment of peace… did I get it right? Yet, the last line implies a (warm) relationship with ‘your’ sister. I really don’t understand.
    So, my point being, is there a darkness toward you and your sister or is it about an intimate moment being lost. 21 words about the setting suggests the latter. So, is the point that the writer is a total bastard? Or have I just wasted 40 minutes trying to unravel a poorly thought out idea?

    1. I think ambiguity is the essence of the piece. When you try to unravel it all you see is your own reflection,
      Or at least that’s what I get.
      For what it’s worth I loved it.

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