Venus looks up at empty nothingness. Every night she lays on her back and blows bubbles.
This night, an old, somber man meanders by. He looks up at the iridescent orbs floating up towards the sky. “It reminds me of before,” the old man whispers, “when there were still stars to see.”
Ava Bales is a 13-year-old Creative Writing student. She reads and writes short stories in her spare time. She has won zero awards and her writing has yet to be published.
Now it has been published. Congratulations! Good story.
Congrats on your first publication! Great job.
Congratulations on being published, Ava! Wonderful story!
I didn’t see where you were going so the ending was a surprise. You built a neat twist in just 50 words. That’s good writing. Congratulations.
I liked this story. It made me feel nostalgic for something that hasn’t happened yet.
Wow this was wonderful! I’ve always been in awe of writers who can create strong emotions and imagery in such a short story.
Very cool! Congratulations!
Congratulations, Ava! The ending gave me chills! I’m sure this is just the first of many published works! Wonderful!
Yea, Ava! Now I want to read the next fifty!
Love this. Keep writing, Ava!
Ava, this is a great story but you need to learn the difference between ‘lays’ (laying eggs, for example), and ‘lies’ (on her back). This will make your work appear more professional. I’m an English teacher and I’m telling you this not as a criticism but to improve your contributions. Good luck with the writing!