She’s huddled at a corner table in the dark bar.
A jazz band is playing.
She lights a cigarette and sips her drink.
Designer sunglasses hide a black eye.
Lipstick covers bruised lips.
She’s a striking presence in designer attire,
but wealth and status can’t protect her from angry fists.
Peter Blau works in Minnesota’s Twin Cities in a variety of settings. He believes everyone has a story to tell. His goal is to help people discover their unique voice and style as they tell those stories with their writing. Peter believes that writing is more than just a means to an end; it is the end in itself.
Powerful story/poem!! Thanks for sharing! Congrats!!
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When I was a child my family spent a lot of time in bars. While my parents socialized and drank, my brother and I would play video games and pool and people watch. I swear Peter Blau writes about a woman I once saw all those years ago, like a ghost coming back to haunt me.
A compelling story that leaves you wanting to know more – a true sign of a gifted writer. Loved it!
This is a powerful story! Nicely done.
A Sultry, LA Noir atmosphere conveyed in so few words is no easy task! Great job! I was awaiting Marlowe, Bosch, Himes, Millhone, or Archer to walk in the bar at any moment. And the sadness of abuse: Will she be “rescued,” or is that something only she can do herself? Please write a follow-up so we know!
Incredible how your 50 words have created such a powerful image!
I love seeing your talent in action, Bapa!
It is amazing how so few words can tell such a deep dark story, and secret. I agree with the others who want to know more. You are a true talent Mr. Blau, and I am honored to have had the opportunities I did, to see you in action.