We’d dated for a year before I reported him for the serial murder of his exes.
“H-how… did you know?” he rasped, limp in the cuffs.
I leaned forward, whispering against his ear: “Like recognizes like.”
His eyes widened as flashing blue and red lights came to drag him away.
Celine Grace is a young writer obsessed with the mystery of ideas and is learning how to use marks on a page to tell them.
Celine, I loved this story! I’d also like to respectfully offer some feedback. The sentence: “Like recognizes like.” When I read that, I actually said out loud, “Whoa!” It was a great twist and payoff to the story. But with another sentence after that, it felt anticlimactic to me.
I would have used the last sentence as the second sentence of the story, leaving the reader with a gut punch (in a good way) ending of “Like recognizes like.”
It’s just my observation, Celine. I still think your story is great!
Perhaps his eyes widened when he realized he could have been a part of her serial chain.
Agree, great story! I will be taking it with me on this Valentine’s day.
Thank you so much for your feedback! Stephen Tilden was correct in assuming that the last sentence was meant to display his reaction to learning the information, but I will definitely keep what you said in mind! Thank you for taking the time to mention it.
Celine, thank you for being so gracious. When Stephen presented his point of view, I could absolutely see your intent with choice of words
and the placement of them. I think, as authors, we can never know 100% how the reader will interpret a story.
Scary twist!
She was observant; he was not. Wonderful!
Inventive and wonderful!
Ewwwwww spooky Good job
A great Valentine’s Day story…. I guess 🫣
Good one. Stephen Kingish.