Target confirmed, advance fee accepted, Robert dresses that night to kill. Black pants, black turtleneck, black greasepaint covering every inch of face and hands. Stealthy, he waits in shrubbery. Hours pass. Lights dim. Robert heeds nature’s call at last.
Sirens erupt: the alarm!
He’d never considered greasepaint below the belt.
Alexandra Renwick’s literary pulp fiction has appeared in Ellery Queen’s & Alfred Hitchcock’s Mystery Magazines, The Exile Book of New Canadian Noir, and Imaginarium: The Best Canadian Speculative Writing. When not inhabiting urban wetlands in Austin, Texas, she can be found curating a crumbling historic manor near downtown Ottawa. More at alexcrenwick.com.
1/10 Personally, I look for something more than a joke in a 50 word piece. Sorry! 1/10
Different strokes for different folks.
I really enjoyed this. Neat twist. Made me smile.
Nice visual image for this one, Alexandra. One can only wonder who was more shocked.
Hi Christian Mcculloch,
I thought this might help you improve your comments. It certainly helps me to keep this in mind:
“Constructive criticism is a form of evaluation that offers both positive and negative feedback. It needs to be valid, useful, and not designed to hurt intentionally or put down anyone or anything. Constructive criticism is often used to help improve the final outcome of a project.”
https://www.reference.com/world-view/constructive-criticism-9a8fcf92b50f583d
I’d also get rid of the running scorecards. This is not meant to insult you, but it’s a bad look and has the potential to reflect more on you than the person you’re scoring.
I hope this helps,
Connell